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Re: Litten Tree
Nope, it's a reference to The Litten Tree in Northampton, England ;) There must be loads of them.
Jan 7, 2008 -
Re: Litten Tree
A little old, but hey, it's been a while, hmm? Hello :) Even the smell of the bus is starting to feel like home My house is just somewhere that ...
Jan 7, 2008 -
Re: Teenage Chameleon
I like this. The title is a great concept, and I think you could incorporate that animal, chameleon imagery into the poem, because it's a good comparison. Not sure about ...
Jan 7, 2008 -
Re: It didn't matter
Gorgeous, as usual. I fear I will be pulled up for a useless crit or two, but really, I couldn't walk by without letting you know what I thought, whether ...
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Re: Untitled Pantoum
Ooh, what an interesting format. Sounds a little difficult, I like how it gets all wrapped up in the last stanza, though. Knowing that it's supposed to follow a set ...
Jan 6, 2008 -
Re: Green Eyes
There are a few typos, but you did say you didn't have time to edit it. This was alright, the rhyming seems a little forced though. You have some good ...
Jan 6, 2008 -
Re: My first post ever! Poems.
This made me smile, was it supposed to? Hehe. You have a very different style, I like it. especially the first stanza - the way you used description there surprised ...
Jan 6, 2008 -
Re: Vision
The style of this poem isn't something I would normally read, but I like it, and you did it well. It reminded me of the Ancient Mariner in it's style ...
Jan 6, 2008 -
Re: The Dying Time
This was good. It sounded good to read - the rhyming worked well. I also like how you ended the poem with a similar image to how you started, only ...
Jan 6, 2008 -
Re: One Last Kiss
This is lovely. It's simple, but not lacking emotion, the rhyming works really well. I don't have anything bad to say about this, it's really pretty, and a little sad. ...
Jan 6, 2008 -
Re: Darkness around
I hate seeing so many topics unanswered, so I'm bringing this up to flex my critting muscles. :) Below I have just corrected some things and put some suggestions. Night ...
Jan 6, 2008 -
Re: Gorgon
I like this. Just a couple of things: "they can’t not harm she says" - Shouldn't this be "they cannot harm she says"? Because it's a double negative, and doesn't ...
Jan 6, 2008 -
Re: A silver spoon to fill in the blanks
I love the first stanza of this. The imagery is great, and I love the tone of the poem. One thing I would say is that "Away from me, go," ...
Jan 6, 2008 -
Re: YWS Groups Makeover Phase 1
An error comes up when I try to go to the advertising and info for usergroups forum, same error as Via said above.
Jan 5, 2008 -
Re: YWS Groups Makeover Phase 1
Yay! Thanks, Nate.
Jan 3, 2008
